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Shaved legs,
blown glass cracked on the edges
headache handouts
two for the price of one
sell away all our liberties
and let them speak for us.

Play out the wrong card
the captain salutes a sinking ship
and a hurricane winks at the corner of our eye
pulled in a whirlpool.

Tornadoes suck themselves in
paradox in a pillowcase
and you wonder what's keeping you up all night
(no, I can't sleep, either)
the monster under your bed
or the monster laying there
inside your mind all the time
and making your hairs stand on the ends.

Life playing on repeat
sinks clogged with secrets too painful to keep
so hard to settle and slow down
rushing head, losing pace
merciless when you beg to finally collapse.

Shave the ashes from your legs
you're fragile like glass
so easily blown and shaped
so easily swallowed and cracked
(and it's not just the edges this time).
©2007-2009 ~breakthatfall
:iconbreakthatfall:

Author's Comments

It barks at no-one else but me
like it's seen a ghost
I guess it's seen the sparks a-glowin
no-one else would know
hey man, slow down, slow down
idiot, slow down, slow down


Editsss: Holy crap, thank you so much for the DD! -dies-

Daily Deviation

Given 2007-08-19

The Tourist by ~breakthatfall is a fast-paced poem with a slight overtone of panic. (Suggested by `WineWriter and Featured by `PoeticWar)

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:iconlittlexblackxflower:
ahhhmazing :D

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"Loneliness and the feeling of being unwanted is the most terrible poverty."

-Mother Teresa
:iconcitizen-13:
How do you do this? This is crazy. If anyone else tried this, they'd sound like a poseur. You do this and everyone is just in awe.

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*puts on running shoes, jumps over trashcans and druggies and hypodermics and through alleyways and squares and across a bridge and a long stretch of I-95 and another bridge and a toll booth and some more I-95 and two more bridges and a ferry*
:iconcitizen-13:
How do you do this? This is crazy. If anyone else tried this, they'd sound like a poseur. You do this and everyone is just in awe.

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*puts on running shoes, jumps over trashcans and druggies and hypodermics and through alleyways and squares and across a bridge and a long stretch of I-95 and another bridge and a toll booth and some more I-95 and two more bridges and a ferry*
:iconbreakthatfall:
:lmao: Thanks so much. :blushes:
Haha you made my day.
:iconlittlexblackxflower:
Welcomeee ^ - ^

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"Loneliness and the feeling of being unwanted is the most terrible poverty."

-Mother Teresa
:iconcitizen-13:
That's nice to know. :lmao:

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*puts on running shoes, jumps over trashcans and druggies and hypodermics and through alleyways and squares and across a bridge and a long stretch of I-95 and another bridge and a toll booth and some more I-95 and two more bridges and a ferry*
:iconwinewriter:
This is a nicely paced poem - fast but the thoughts are still understandable. Such a wonderfully strange poem. These are my favorite lines:

Shave the ashes from your legs
you’re fragile like glass
so easily blown and shaped
so easily swallowed and cracked
(and it’s not just the edges this time).

Deep while creative. ;) Nice

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Lt. Maria Laguerta: So then he must have already had the head with him in the front seat. Huh, that's weird. Why would he keep it there?
Dexter Morgan: I don't know. So he could use a carpool lane.
:iconbreakthatfall:
Thank you very much for the comment and fave. =D
:iconwinewriter:
You're welcome! :D

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Lt. Maria Laguerta: So then he must have already had the head with him in the front seat. Huh, that's weird. Why would he keep it there?
Dexter Morgan: I don't know. So he could use a carpool lane.

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